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Saturday, August 26, 2023

What's in a star?

I read a lot of books as well as reviews.

I also write both books and reviews.

Reviews and Ratings are the currency by which books are valued in the book industry — but this value is only a reflection of reality if readers take the time to write reviews, or at least give a rating and upvote any reviews that are helpful, fair and capture their own views (rewarding the good reviewers). Of course it important that reviews don't give away things that should come as surprise (fiction) or would give away secrets (non-fiction/how-to). 

I try to be guided by the author/publishers' own description and blurb, what they themselves reveal. But some newer Indie authors do give away too much, particular in descriptions of sequels or multibook box sets (so avoid reading beyond the description of the first book). Recently I wrote a review in which the Subject/Title was a warning not to read too much of the author's description, but since the dots for reading more come before the reviews on Amazon, most will read that before getting to the reviews.

Me? If a description seems to giving away the plot, I will simply click on the stars/ratings link and have a look at the reviews - again skipping forward quickly if I sense any spoilers coming. Another approach is to start on a review site like Goodreads and look for the highly rated books in your genres of interest. Many reviewers post on both Goodreads and Amazon (and indeed getting to the last page of an Amazon eBook should trigger opportunity rate/review on both with one click. Professional or author reviews who review on other sites or their only blog should do so too (and you shouldn't have to ask).

As reviewers, there are many things we have to balance, and the balance will vary depending on the purpose of the review, and the type of review.

Editorial Reviews, Advance Reader Copies and Galley Proofs

The first kind of review is the editorial review, written before a book is published, by a 'professional' reviewer. This is intended to supply the kind of endorsements and comments that might appear on the book cover or on its online sales/preorder page, and thus is obtained well before publication using a preliminary version of the book (ARC or Proof).

Newspapers and magazines, blogger and websites are the major sources of such reviews. Professional can mean one of two things, one that the person has written a lot of reviews (experienced), or two that the reviewer has been independently certified in some way (those associated with a formal publication or reputable company).

Advance Reader Copies (ARCs) are often made available by authors on an ad hoc basis (or through sites like BookFunnel). Especially for traditionally published books, they are made available on sites like NetGalley and Edelweiss that are dominated by traditional publishers, make ARCs available to reviewers from the galley proof stage, and vet the reviewers as professional both in the sense of having experience and having an outlet.

Another major source of early reviews is authors of similar books — publishers like to get quotable endorsements from writers in their stable. I am always wary of these, because often the words are put into the mouths of those authors by the publishers, and that author may not have even read the entire book. I won't write an endorsement or positive review unless I have (though publishers tend to make their publishing decisions on a synopsis and an opening chapter).

There are also websites that allow you to buy such review and endorsements. The reputable ones seek to be 'honest'. Some try to show they are honest by being 'balanced' - and this is often be interpreted to mean that they must include some negatives in a review. Unfortunately, these can be forced or even totally made up ("well it is self-published so there must be some typos and grammos even if I didn't notice them").

If it is worth mentioning typos and grammos in a review, then it is important to provide examples. Without evidence, such a statement is worthless even libellous - and for an ARC review there will be a path to give specific feedback to the author or publisher if the reviewer is inclined to be helpful and there aren't too many errors. So it is important to address the actual issues clearly and accurately (I take notes as I read), to be clearly helpful and obscurely diplomatic... What ever you do, don't attack the author or say anything that can be construed as such! Read it from the author's perspective before hitting that commit button.

Unhelpful and Misleading Reviews vs Helpful Reviewers

One reviewer (from a company deliberately not mentioned in this blog post) said of one of my ARCs/Galleys "The story is marred somewhat by formatting mistakes, grammatical errors, misused words, and other linguistic details, but the heart of the story is strong, and the premise is enchanting from the start." 

The company would not retract that, but did correct the repeated use of a masculine pronoun for my decidedly female heroine (who was one of a group of middle grade girls, and at one point was asked to take off her bra for a medical scan). The Editor-in-Chief did take the time to scan the book, and pointed out deviations from their formatting expectations (clearly based on the much deprecated Chicago Manual of Style), ignoring the fact that this was a prepublication ARC/galley/proof provided them for prepublication editorial review purposes. However, my query explicitly focused on the "grammatical errors, misused words, and other linguistic details" and these remain unidentified: a new read through the book confirmed that this statement was unwarranted (not to mention all the previous input I've had on the book).

So I am left with a statement, in multiple places on the web, that impugns my reputation as a Professor of Computational Neuroscience and Psycholinguistics writing a story that builds on this specific expertise, uses the appropriate terminology, refers to actual biomedical equipment and scientific theories using the appropriate terms, and sometimes even names the brand of the device concerned. Frankly, I am dubious that the reviewer really read the book (missing that the protagonist was a girl), but maybe they did a quick scan like the EiC and saw some words they didn't understand. 

Needless to say, I am disinclined to trust my prepublication ARCs/Proofs to this company again for editorial review. But unfortunately, they are not alone — and the websites and clubs that want you pay for reviews are probably the worst, whilst some well known sites want you to pay to put your book on the site without actually guaranteeing that it will be reviewed But having a reviewer decline to review your book (with or without reading it) is much better than being stuck with a bad review (in both senses) by a reviewer that was not the right reader/audience for book, or simply didn't take the time to do a proper, fair, job of it.

On the other hand I, as a reviewer, have to make sure that I don't fall into the same traps. Especially as you can't argue with anonymous reviewers, and authors really have no recourse. In any case, as an author/reviewer I want to help authors, particularly indie authors, not make problems for them.

If you are dealing with a prepbulication ARC/galley/proof, errors should be communicated to the author or publisher so they can be fixed. You are not dealing with the final format of the book, so complaints about format are inappropriate and unprofessional. Personally I dislike the double-spaced formats that are expected in manuscripts (or more correctly typescripts) per the traditional and modern formats specified by most publishers and agents, and some review services. Note that manuscripts are, etymologically, handwritten handscripts, and that the wide-margin double-spacing convention in typescripts and thesis submissions was primarily so that proofreaders and examiners could write corrections between the lines, with proofreading marks in the margins. The secondary advantage, for proofreaders, is that it slows you down as a reader, stops you getting too immersed in the story, and focusses you on the minutae of formatting, spellings and grammar; whereas the final format of the book is designed to guide your eye through the text quickly and make reading easier. 

As reviewers, we are not paid proofreaders, and are meant to be appreciating the work as whole, getting the same big picture that a normal reader will have. Double-spaced PDFs (or ePubs - yes I got one of those recently) are totally inappropriate.

On the other hand, supplying editorial reviewers in a double-spaced format might avoid the kind of complaints about formatting that I quoted above. But as a reviewer, I avoid these double-spaced copies, and indeed PDFs in general (if permissions allow, I will tend to convert such PDFs or DOCs to single-spaced versions, ideally ePubs, that can be read comfortably on my eReader — if permissions don't allow this, I have on occasions declined to read things too unwieldy to read fluently on my eReader, or been blocked from reading them because you only get one go at the document).

In particular, sometimes books are provided with Digital Rights Management as the encrypted ACSM files that can hide different formats, and the app that opens it doesn't necessarily know how to deal with that hidden format, the once-only DRM locking you out for ever. Edeweiss is the big culprit here as it does not tell you what formats are availabe, while NetGalley does and prioritizes ePubs. Also ePubs are sometimes faked by taking page images to make an illegible ePub that doesn't scale to a handheld device; moreover Adobe Digital Editions (ADE) is not suitable for reading on tablets/phones without keyboard/mouse. However  NetGalley also has its own app in which selected and approved or autoapproved ARCs magically appear, which navigates with simple left/right swipes like the Kindle app.

So ARCs tend to be ePubs or PDFs in galley proof form, in which case they should not be double-spaced, and may or may not approximate the final publication (galley proofs exist primarily so that final proofreads can get rid of the remaining typographical errors, while ARCs are for advance/beta readers and editorial reviewers — but these days the same document usually serves both roles). They may also be physical books, e.g. Proof or Author copies sent direct from Amazon, or similar copies obtained from other PoD publishers like Direct2Digital. 

Also be aware that (Word 365) DOCX reduces embedded images to about 200dpi,  irrespective of settings, which can impact the quality of images/cover and thus reviews. The older DOC format doesn't compress and is much safer (just don't make a DOCX and then use that saved version to create a DOC or PDF, as the loss is by then already irretrievable). I have also stayed with the non-X version for posters in Powerpoint for similar reasons (and keep several older versions of Microsoft Office installed on one of my computers to deal with the various other incompatibilities and downgrades of the last 20 years or so).

So how to get a good professional editorial review?

One website that stands out has having a fair approach to reviews is Readers' Favorite. They offer a free professional review! But it can take a while, although most are completed withing 3 months. They also offer paid packages of 1, 3 or 5 express reviews, with most of those completed within 3 weeks. The reviews are automatically sent to libraries, bookstores and schools (free) and may also be sent out as a media release (paid). They provide a medallion for five-star reviewed books, but also have an annual book award, and there is an interesting connection with the reviews. Entry into the awards triggers a review, and each package increment (two reviews) gives you an extra category entry free, which actually offsets the extra cost of the express review packages.

Another standout is the Wishing Shelf Awards which offers not only awards based on multiple readers of the appropriate demographic (reading groups, schools), offers developmental and editorial review services. The person behind this is himself an author of award-winning children's books, which brings me to my next topic.

Children's Books: Picture Books through Middle Grade to Young Adult

I am always happy to send either ePubs or paperbacks to reviewers (and for children's books the reviewer may actually mediate/mentor a child's reviews - yes, I'm happy to send them to parents/teachers who write reviews for their children to look at, and for children's books physical books may be necessary/preferred).

The Wishing Shelf Awards and Reviews, out of Europe (UK+Sweden), actually gets groups of school children to review of appropriate age groups to review Children's/MG/YA books – and provides good feedback if requested (extra cost). They also have adult reviewers (reading groups) reviewing the full range of books, so don't let the name put you off.

Incidentally, beta readers and beta testers refer to a second phase of testing by people removed from the creative process — the first, or alpha, stage of reading/testing is done in house. Again, I try to include children in a broad age range around my target audience. It is important to incorporate feedback from alpha and beta readers of the appropriate demographic before sending books out for editorial review. 

A writers group can be a good source of readers — in fact, for my writers group it is in the first instance alpha hearers, although later those who are interested will have opportunity to feed in at the galley/proof/ARC/beta stage. But we are still second guessing what the children will think.

Children live in the adult world and hear and watch adult conversations, adult news broadcasts and adult-oriented TV shows. And just because a child is in a certain class or of a certain age doesn't mean they are the same as every other child of that class/age. So explore, ask children to read your ARCs — and ask them which of their friends would enjoy it!

"Friends, neighbours and countrymen" can be a good source of parents and hence kids — and yes, "lend me your ears": reading the book out loud, or segments of it, can be useful. This is especially the case when your audience is MG/YA or younger. You will also tend to sell more paperbacks in the Children's/MG market as parents/relatives/teachers buy them for the children -— and if they like them, teachers will add them to their class libraries.

Teachers, parents and librarians and publishers have a fair idea of what children will like, but these days some gatekeepers tend to play down to a perceived low level expectation or up to a particular agenda, rather than encouraging young readers to explore and grow and develop, raising their reading level, developing their vocabularies, enhancing their cognitive capabilities, and learning social skills. 

Also children also read aspirationally — in particular they like to read about the kind of people they want to become, and about kids who are just a bit older than them.

Publication of Editorial Reviews

Editorial reviews, or their snappy one liners, glowing phrases and explicit endorsements, often find themselves on the cover of the book or in the description on the bookshop websites. Amazon's author page also allows you to put these into a separate section on your Amazon Author Page (which is used on their main North American .com site, but not on others).

The full reviews are generally published in the reviewers' own media outlets, whether website, blog or physical magazine or newspaper.

Many reviewers will also (optionally or automatically) put them up on Goodreads and/or Amazon. Some allow you to opt out, or have it go up only if it gets a certain number of stars. I always allow it to go up, and don't select the 'suppress if bad' option. In fact, every review helps (the number of reviews is important) and a spectrum of reviews reflects different people having different tastes and different expectations (and readers can tell when it is the review that is poor rather than the book). But this is where upvoting is important (or downvoting if allowed) as this affects which reviews are shown first, even if filtered by number of stars. In some cases, commenting is also possible (ideally by readers rather than the author).

Reviewers should acknowledge it if they received an ARC, and specify how (from the author, publisher, Netgalley, Edelweiss, ...), and should then go on to explain that it was voluntary. I tend to say something like: I received an obligation-free copy of this book from the publisher and am reviewing it voluntarily — my opinions are my own.

Amazon Verified Purchaser vs Kindle Unlimited - Customer/Reader Reviews

While reviews of books you receive for free can, and should, be included by the reviewer amongst the normal reviews on the book pages, Amazon makes special note of 'Verified Purchaser' reviews. That is people who actually spent money to get the book. This doesn't include ARCs, and unfortunately it also doesn't necessarily include borrows on Kindle Unlimited — even though we have paid for the privilege and authors get paid for each page read (typically close to half a cent a page, which is actually about half what they'd get for a 300 page eBook at the minimum price of USD2.99, although actually more like a third of the per page printing cost for pBooks).

Currently (and I keep this info updated as I can), it seem that KU borrows can review if they write their review on their Kindle Reader or in their Kindle App, having proceeded through the book at a normal pace (and there seems also to be an expectation that this will take at least 12 hours). If a reviewer gets to the rating/review section sooner than this policy allows, they will be locked out of reviewing in the app. I read mostly on a phone, and hate writing on a phone.  This can mean reviews are short (minimum only 20 words) and I'm a little short (frustrated with Amazon and the unwieldy interface, with terse reviews not putting things as diplomatically as I should). So what I do is transfer over to the Kindle App on my computer to write the review (or write it in an app, and cutnpaste it over once the 12 hours are up).

There are websites that encourage authors to review books in a pool, and carefully develop reviewers skills and rate or certify their reviewers. 

A long established one is OnlineBookClub, although its website is rather clunky. It is strongly moderated, meaning there can be delays due to the moderation process as they sort out discrepancies (which is good for authors and extra work for reviewers). Authors pay different amounts for the editorial reviews according to the level of the professional 'team' reviewer (who gets paid). Authors can't be team reviewers, but once a book is team-reviewed, the Authors Review Authors (ARA) scheme allows authors to gain credits for reviews of other people's books they've completed and then spend these on getting a review from the pool of ARA members.  

CES Pro has a similar, but much newer, Community Book Exchange Program where authors can add a book to the program for review and in turn be given a book to review (they try to make it relevant, and you can request another).

Another new one, which I'm finding works very well, is Get Authentic Review. This again is author reviews author type reviewing, so people have a better idea about how to write reviews than most Amazon reviewers. A typical 300-500 page book is worth ten points, with more or less points allocated/required for shorter/longer works. As soon as you have provided the link Amazon sends to your review, you get the points and can choose a book to review (and you get an initial credit of 9 points - enough to get a 200 page book reviewed). I have experienced some glitches, but their help is very responsive, human and helpful.

In all cases, you obtain the book in the normal way, and if available at a reasonable price (e.g. on an Amazon Countdown) I will buy the book rather than borrow it, where it would take up limited space in my KU library and the review would forgo the coveted 'Verified Purchaser' label. For a 500-600 page book at the minimum price of $2.99 or a 200 page book at the countdown price of $0.99, the author gets around the same through Kindle Unlimited/Kindle Select as for a sale; for a shorter book, proportionally less. I might even read the book on KU, and THEN buy it in the case of a five-star novel or a non-fiction book that I want to have available permanently.  Buying the book is also a cheap way out of the KU-lockout. The cost of a book, is not a high price to pay for a review by someone who knows what its like to be an indie author and what a good review should look like.

Note that OBC's ARA and CESP's CBEP and the GAR point-based reviews are NOT book swaps where authors review each other's books. This is regarded as unethical, and generally sanctions will be applied if discovered (e.g. by Amazon). An important principle is that reviewers are at arms length and reviews are voluntary but this doesn't mean you can't know an author you're reviewing (e.g. personally, through professional correspondence, or by meeting them at a conference or fan meet). 

What about if you are reviewing a book in return/credit for reviewing a third party book from a review pool? This meets Amazon's guidelines: OBC ARA shows you 50 possible books at a time, and allows you to select up to five at a time to look at; GAR allows you to see all available books together or by category and choose one at a time; and CESP CBEP requests you to review one book they select. But if you don't like the book, and don't feel that you want to waste more time on it — and it is not that it is a bad book, just not to your taste — in all reviewing pools you can opt out and get another book to review. 

Feedback and Errata: English Grammar, Spelling and Formatting

Unless a book is really unprofessionally presented, I would normally make no comment in the review about occasional typos, grammos and formatting errors in the book, but if possible will pass them back to the author (through OBC or CESP or GAR if they nominated the book). But more generally if reviewing directly on Amazon or Goodreads, this direct author contact is not easy (unless there is contact information for the author in the book). In such cases I might mention the errors and give one or two examples of each kind.

There are, however, some things I find really annoying but have to hold back on, e.g. routine use of "and I" when it is the object of a verb or preposition, and thus accusative, e.g. in constructions like "He gave my brother and me a lift", "He then wanted my brother and me to pay for the petrol", "In the end he got physical and demanded money from my brother and me." Incorrect using "and I" is okayish in dialogue where you are trying to convey that the speaker is uneducated and trying to obey the grammar rules of the upper crust, but best practice is not to get too carried away conveying dialect. The educational problem here is that in response to the argot "me and John went to the park" parents/teachers simply say "No, don't say 'me and John' say 'John and I went to the park'" and don't explain the rules, and often don't even know them themselves (and there are two type of rule bound up together here: the grammatical nominative/accusative distinction; and the social convention of putting yourself last). This leads to overgeneralization — the rule the children learn is always say 'and I' and never 'me and' or 'and me', and then it may be further generalized with 'and him' becoming 'and he', etc.

In relation to formatting and spelling, reviewers need to be aware that there are different models, and while US publishers can insist on Webster and the Chicago Manual of Style, there are other countries and other conventions — and for the US, the New York Times Manual of Style is much much better than the outdated Chicago one that was originally dictated by printers on the basis of what looks good, rather than sound principles of grammar and logic. Similarly, modern British spelling, grammar and punctuation was largely standardized by William Caxton's publishing house in the late 1400s, in the name of consistency — presumably some authors railed against that too when their preferred forms were deprecated. I would never complain about such conventions in a review just because it looked strange or unusual to me. But if it really is a reason not to buy the book, if it really makes the story hard to understand, then breaking conventions is worth mentioning — with explicit explanations of the specific issues you are concerned about.

One bugbear in relation to punctuation is the em-dash — which is meant to be the width of an 'M' (and in modern typesetting conventions should have space around it, but ideally narrower spaces than usual) while the en-dash (the width of an 'N' with normal spaces around it) is also accepted/recommended. No spaces means that it combines with the words on either side to look like a single word, and word processors treat that combination as a word. Poorly (or 'artistically') designed fonts can have very long em-dashes; and long dashes, small spaces or no space cause problems for the word processor in trying to break lines typeset as (left and right) justified text. Dashes are used as weaker form of parenthesis than brackets — often with explanation or examples — but stronger than commas, and less ambiguous when there are commas elsewhere in the sentence. When the closing bracket would be at the end of the sentence, comma and dash parenthesis is still quite appropriate — it is just that there is no explicit closing punctuation needed as the sentence terminating punctuation terminates it too (as does nesting enclosure by actual parentheses).

Note that, generally speaking, parenthesis using round or square brackets should be kept to a minimum in fiction, and such incidental information set off with other punctuation, most often commas, if minor, or dashes — for significant chunks of text that include a verb or a comma.

The (thin-spaced) em-dash or (normally-spaced) en-dash can also be used to mark a sharp external interruption (usually followed by end quote or resuming after a start quote), and should not be confused with the three dot elision mark  (a single  Unicode character, that Word will tend to substitute for the individual dots). Elision indicates where a speaker has trailed off without finishing a thought or giving their conclusions or ... 

Sometimes this is because it is understood, and potentially even completed, by the hearer. Sometimes it may be because they've changed their mind, realized what they were going to say is wrong. Sometimes it is simply an indication that they need time to think... and they will then resume the thought. Like period, the dots should adjoin the word when they mark that part of the word is missing. Like period, it can also adjoin at the end of an utterance (no actual spoken/written words are broken or omitted). But, in contrast with period and apostrophe for just part of a word missing (elided), it is spaced when whole words are missing (elided) — word-level elision is used in formal quotation to indicate where extraneous details of parenthetical comments are omitted (and square brackets with replacement/summary text can be used instead of dots if needed in order to make a proper sentence).

And it is the three dot pause marker that should be used, not the single point, when you draw out a sentence: never... use... fullstops... The individual words are not fully complete utterances, which is what period indicates. Period! Also, in prose, you don't capitalize after anything but sentence final punctuation (.?!) as (apart from proper nouns/names/titles and 'I') you only capitalize when you are starting a new sentence. Once except to this is when colon is followed by a numbered or bullet list of full sentences.

I also often see colon/semicolon anomalies (notably semicolons used where colons are needed) in "professionally reviewed" and "traditionally published" books. 

Colon is used to introduce explications, exemplifications or implications of what went before (any of Kipling's servants, often a list: What and Where and When, and How and Why and Who) and using a semicolon rather than colon signals that there is no direct relationship (semicolon is more like a comma but for more complex items, whereas colon is more like a period but for more directly connected items). The dash can sometime be used instead of colon , and indeed a ':–' usage was formerly common in introducing lists, but is now commonly deprecated.

Semicolon is like a comma, looks like one, and functions like one as a list separator. It also looks like a colon, and will mostly be used in a list of complex phrases or clauses that follow a colon. Colon separates the sentence into two parts, where the first part is usually a clause and the second part is often a list of examples or alternatives using its lower level 'semi' form to separate the examples. Period separates sentences, and where a sentence is a list of examples comma is the lower level derived form used to separate examples.

Semicolon is also used without colon to separate complex phrases or clauses (each usually containing a verb or perhaps commas) in a list, much as comma is used to separate individual words or simple phrases (typically not containing a verb or commas) — really it is a matter of complexity, and ideally the semicolon separated clauses match in some way: e.g. they may be temporally sequential or logically parallel, exemplifying different facets or outcomes of an underlying concept or situation. Modern editors will sometimes call these 'run-on' sentences, but in artistic, literary, poetic, stylistic writing, the semicolon can be preferred for balance and effect. 

They are partly right, in that such 'run-on' sentences could be separated into separate sentences with period. However, when there is a strong connection, e.g. the actions were performed in sequence to achieve a particular outcome, the list of sequential actions may be separated by commas; or a list of parallel actions or alternatives may be separated by semicolons.

There is one final point that needs to be made about lists: 'and' or 'or' are often used at the end of the list to clarify the conjunctive or disjunctive nature of the list. To emphasize the completion of a complex action, 'and then' may be used instead, or some other adverbial like 'and finally'. The 'and' (etc.) may be used bare — and this is typical when the components are simple — or may be used in conjunction with comma or semicolon, and this ', and' "Oxford comma" should be regarded as optional: as merely a guide to how to read the sentence (especially out loud). So inclusion or omission of the Oxford comma is not a punctuation error but a stylistic choice. 

Generally, I will include the comma if I want a pause, and exclude it if I want the reader to read without a significant pause. This also applies to adverbs and adverbials more generally, at the start of a sentence. You really don't want commas around every individual adverb or adverbial phrase, and if you have commas for adverbs, commas for parenthesis, and commas for lists — all the the one sentence — it can simply get too complex. So it is better to omit the optional commas before and/or after conjunctions and adverbials in such situations. As another hint, the longer words/phrases (-ly adverbs  or multiword adverbials) tend to be used as introductions to longer units of text — most likely at the start of a paragraph: so 'On the other hand,' 'Alternatively', 'Therefore' are used with a comma at the start  of a paragraph; while 'And', 'But', 'So', 'Then' generally are used without a comma at the start of a sentence or clause; and  'when', 'where', 'while', 'if' are not immediately followed by a comma, but rather introduce an adverbial clause that is going to be followed by or preceded by a comma).

[See Kipling's 'serving-men' poem below for example, in which each quatrain is a single sentence, and the colon could have been used on several occasions but wasn't (because the poet is layering detail rather than providing explication — viz it is not intended as explanation/exemplification). We see illustrated the similarity between the use of colon and dash to introduce examples, where the dash has a more parenthetic feel and a stronger prosodic effect signaling a fading voice, a longer pause and a gathering of thoughts (and indeed the parenthesis is paralleled across the final two quatrains). In the same context we can also see the semicolon used to parallel and contrast ideas rather than using the colon to subordinate them and highlight an explicatory or implicatory relationship: in the middle of the poem, the semicolon is highlighting a tongue-in-cheek contrast between the repeated first person "I", "folk" with different views, and "she" with a different practice that she doesn't even think about (colon might have worked, as might elision, but would invoke different levels of pause, with different prosody); at the start, without the daringly parenthesized and tense-challenging "all I knew" line, a colon would have worked, but semicolons are appropriate for the three element list with its implication that the items have no direct relationship — what they taught and what they're called, is implied to be incidental, although of course they are important clues to the meaning of the poem because they aren't just names, and of course 'she' is the beneficiary of the present tense teaching.]

Unfortunately a lot of modern reviewers and publishers, and grammar checkers and teachers, don't take the time to understand the correct usage and logic of such grammar and punctuation, and even promote incorrect usage, and provide incorrect corrections. They also seem to be immune to the prosodic effect and literary intent of careful choice of punctuation. Like Wilde and Kipling, I will sometime agonize for a morning about the precise punctuation and then change my mind again in the afternoon (the earliest attested such anecdote, published in 1884, is attributed to Oscar Wilde: he took out a comma and put it back in again).

Then there are the exclamation-mark nazis who would eliminate them all with extreme prejudice. If it is an exclamation, it requires an exclamation mark — and this includes anything ordered or commanded, or delivered with sharp intonation.

Incidentally, the serving men turn up in different guises. Kipling uses them as interrogative pronouns, but they may also be used as relative pronouns — although there is come confusion possible here:

  • I talked to the politician [that/who/whom] I'd never met before.
  • I talked to the politician, whom I'd never met before.
The first (adjectival) version identifies which politician I talked to (there were several in the room). It is not necessary to use any of the three choices here, which illustrates that it is a 'weak' usage where an unaccented 'that' would be the best alternative. The 'who/whom' gets mixed up with the second meaning and becomes very sensitive to the prosody used (with 'whom' being grammatically correct, and 'who' being a common corruption of the required accusative to its nominative form).

The second (pronoun) version is parenthetic, simply commenting that I'd never previously met the the person. 

The case corrupting 'who' form is problematic here because it suggests I'm going to talk about something the politician did (nominative = subject of a verb), where as the 'whom' form is appropriate as I am talking but something that happened to the politician (accusative= object of a verb or preposition): I met him. Note that the accusative is used for the object of a verb even when the actor in a following apposition (where the verb is expressed by a participle or infinitive), but the nominative is used for the actor with active indicative verb forms:
  • I saw she left on the train. [simple past]
  • I saw her left (behind) by the train. [past passive participle: resulting from a past action]
  • I saw her leave on the train. [simple infinitive: expressing a contemporaneous action]
  • I saw her leaving in the train. [present active participle: expressing durative action]
  • I asked her to leave on the train. [indirect infinitive: expressing optative aim]
Another set of examples using a less regular verb to make the past distinctions clearer:

  • I saw he ate the shark. [simple past]
  • I saw him eaten by the shark. [past passive participle: resulting from a past action]
  • I saw him eat the shark. [simple infinitive: expressing a contemporaneous action]
  • I saw him eating the shark. [present active participle: expressing durative action]
  • I asked him to eat the shark. [indirect infinitive: expressing optative aim/act]

Productive vs Unproductive forms, and new usages

I've also had reviews rejected, apparently, for using -ize rather than -ise verbs ('fixing' these got it approved). This -ize is a productive ending pronounced with the 'z' sound: that is, it is used for modern and newly coined words, while ancient -ice and -ise words have roots in other languages (note that in older words a noun/verb distinction is reflected with -ice/-ise (e.g. device/devise, advice/advise) and some word families have lost  either the orthographic distinction or the voicing that normally characterizes the verb (practice/practise, use/use, abuse/abuse, etc., extent/extend, intent/intend), although in speech the missing voicing may still leave marking with extra length for the verb and falling intonation (tone) for the noun. An adjective or noun that doesn't already have its own underlying or cognate verb for how to make/achieve it, can form a verb by adding -ize. When you use something to do something (means rather than result), the noun can be used directly as a verb (he headed the ball to the forward who shouldered past the goalie before kneeing it into the goal). 

Coined or coerced words, and new usages in general, are not errors, and are indeed absolutely essential in Science and Science Fiction, to label new inventions, even if Word and Amazon etc. flag them.

Traditionally Published vs Self-Published

Another factor that might affect reviews, is who published the book under review. 

At the ARC/Galley stage, prepublication, it is usually possible to communicate with the author or publisher (depending on how you got the ARC), and you can usually choose between a private communication and a formal review if there are issues, or indeed do both. The tricky part comes when there is no such obvious backchannel. But if I've agreed to write are review and have completed the book, then how it was published and priced becomes a factor in how I present the review.

If the book has a big name publisher and a big note author and a big number price, then I will tend not to hold back on scathing comments if I feel my time and/or money have been wasted. And unfortunately a lot of rubbish does come this route these days, marketed on reputation and churned out without much quality control — sometimes even by ghostwriters. Frankly, these days, I find I am far more likely to be happy with an indie book that I've got through Kindle Unlimited on Amazon than an expensive traditional route book that has hit all the trendy marketing buttons the traditional publishers demand (even if I got it as an ARC, if they view me as worthy of one — they review the reviewers).

For the struggling new author going the self-published or small/own press route, I have a lot of sympathy. I actually fit in both camps with half my books published by a well known publisher, and half published under a very small imprint. I also see a large part of my role as author and reviewer as being educative — that's why I write these long and hopefully not too tedious blogs as well.

So the same book that got a scathing review as a big big big book, might get a much more encouraging and enlightening review when it is the little guy. Of course the number of stars should be the same, but I am enjoying indie books more, and BookSirens documents that I tend to rate indie and small press book higher (noting that I am in the top 1% of reviewers of self-published books by volume). 

Writing a helpful review that, in a public space, actually helps indie authors improve their game while not scaring off their readers — that takes real time and effort: think hours rather than minutes, think sleeping on it, think revisiting and listing some of the specific kinds of issues with extracted examples and suggested improvements.

So what about the stars?

Of course, the obvious question is exactly what the stars mean in a review or rating. I think of them like grade points, which in turn have a connection to statistical concepts like standard deviation. 

Standardized scores (like IQ) are actually scaled to have a nominal mean or median (100) and standard deviation (15). 67-68% of people are then expected to lie within 1 standard deviations (30) of the mean and 95-96% within 2 standard deviations, on the assumption that the distribution of scores (IQ) is relatively normal (bell-shaped).

Marks out of 100 are sometimes standardized with a mean or median of 65 and a standard deviation of 10, so the 55-65-75 Pass/Credit or C/B range corresponds to one standard deviation either way, and grading to the curve tries to achieve ~65% of students in this range (2/3), while 45-55 (Conceded Pass or D) and 75-85 (Distinction or A) can each expect about ~15% (1/7), with 2-4% getting High Distinctions or A+ (1 in 25 to 50), and hopefully <5% of those who complete everything miss the mark and actually fail. Of course, this doesn't account for those that don't even make it to or through the exam. In practice, the pass mark is normally 50, pushing a few more (~8%) from D to C (if normally distributed), and supplementary assessment may also push a student from D to C.


So what about the stars?

***** A or DN+ — maybe 15-20% — if you give five stars out freely, it ceases to mean much!

**** B or CR — maybe 20-25% — this is where most good but not exceptional books will lie

*** C or P — maybe 35-40% — this is fine, passable, but not distinguishable from the crowd

** D or CP — maybe 20-25% — this is poor, but I'll concede it has some redeeming features

* E or F — maybe ~5% — books should have been through enough wringers to avoid this!!!


This effectively converts the percentage marks associated with the grade points to the five star scale, by dividing by 20 and rounding up. 

Of course there is a tendency to be lazy regarding the *** books. If there is nothing particularly good or particularly bad about a book, I am disinclined to actually write a detailed review— so may not bother, or may just give it a rating and/or a quick comment. These days I try to give it a rating and may actually look at other reviews and upvote those that I agree with. Reading should be fun, but reviewing is hard work, most especially for those books that lie in the middle with good and bad points. 

If a book is getting consistent * and/or ** reviews, then that suggests revision and supplementary assessment is needed! If the reading was hard work, or I did not finish, then (unless there was a genre issue) * or ** is what it will get. If it simply wasn't my kind of book, I might skip the review. But if I can, I will try to express why I found it hard to finish, and identify what kinds of readers I would expect to like and not like the book — and may even rate it ***.

**** is reserved for books I actually liked (in some degree — remember the rounding), while ***** is for those relatively few books that I felt were exceptional, the kind of books I'd like to write — though I'd likely still think there were some things I'd have done differently: it doesn't have to be perfect to get five stars (again, remember the rounding).

Confusingly some rating systems are out of different numbers of stars, e.g. four. In this case I'd divide the percentage by 25 and round up. Actually, I tend to mark out of 10 (for complex work 20) with half marks, and that then multiplies by 10 (resp. 5) to get a percentage, so rating out of 5 in whole numbers doesn't come easy although I am used to it now — and there is still that last minute rounding decision. I tend to rate first, write the review while it percolates, and then adjust at the end if needed (maybe up, if I found positive points to write about).

But I'm think in terms of fractions or decimals or "would be five stars except", and currently I am rating/ranking things for the Aurealis Awards out of 5 (as requested) but with one decimal place — so effectively with 50 shades of grey.

Further Reading

Reviews in the AI age

References and Notes

Some people may quibble about the word 'grammo' for 'grammatical error', or more precisely 'confused word error', like the wrong version of their/there/they're. 

Google's Ngram Viewer shows 'grammo' has been around since the mid 1800s, but its usage decreased throughout the 20th century, but since 1996 on the increase again.

Google Ngrams are a very useful tool for understanding the chronological (diachronic) usage of words and phrases (Ngrams).


Here is a paper about fixing the 'grammo' in 1997 (it is about a system that corrected such confused words with learned statistics/AI of a kind now ubiquitous in word processors and grammar checkers: the demo system took the form of a macro package for Word, which itself didn't correctly handle such things innately):

David M W Powers (1997), Learning and Application of Differential Grammars, CoNLL97, ACL.

• https://aclanthology.org/W97-1011.pdf

• https://scholar.google.com.au/citations?view_op=view_citation&citation_for_view=qTvbbD4AAAAJ:_FxGoFyzp5QC

Google Scholar is another tool that's worth knowing about to see the impact of scholarly work and track down all an author's publications when writing literature reviews (for non-fiction books and theses) — but that is a whole separate topic (and yes, as both author and reviewer I regard a lit. review and bilbiography/references as essential in non-fiction books: to be taken seriously non-fiction authors need to demonstrate they are familiar with the existing sources of information out there, and ideally critique them; and I've even included footnotes and scientific/technical references/evidence in my fiction, and fictional fables and citations in my non-fiction).


And here is the full quotation and citation for Kipling's serving men:

I keep six honest serving-men
(They taught me all I knew);
Their names are What and Where and When
And How and Why and Who.
I send them over land and sea,
I send them east and west;
But after they have worked for me,
I give them all a rest.
I let them rest from nine till five,
For I am busy then,
As well as breakfast, lunch, and tea,
For they are hungry men.
But different folk have different views;
I know a person small —
She keeps ten million serving-men,
Who get no rest at all!
She sends’em abroad on her own affairs,  
From the second she opens her eyes —
One million Hows, two million Wheres,
And seven million Whys!


Rudyard Kipling (1865-1936)
in The Elephant’s Child (1900)
a Just-so Story

Tuesday, November 8, 2022

Minority Rule - an alien in my own country

If a dozen minority or single-cause lobby groups with a 5% or so representation band together then, even with overlaps, about half the population is covered. By the time 20 such 1/20 groups get together then over 60% of the population is covered (this is true for any larger K 1/K groups too, as mathematically, in the limit, 1/e = 38.2% of the 'silent majority' are missed). 

Hey! I'm a scientist, and my most cited paper is about doing statistics properly.

So how does this work out in practice?

The party-controlled caucusing subverts the democratic system as a few leaders representing a few minority causes can control the government, stack the courts, etc. The democratic system is about electing people in constituencies to represent their constituents. In the Westminster system, and other two-house variants, the lower house represents local areas while the upper house is able to represent larger and less geographically local interests. But in both cases, the representative is elected, not the party.

The party system allows for people with consistent views to work together and form a government, knowing that they have a large measure of common ground. But a caucus that forces party line voting with the threat of expulsion and punitive financial penalties... this is a travesty. A politician can still vote their conscience, cross the floor, and risk this — and some do,  and some do leave their parties one way or the other, but normally only in the case of parties that don't enshrine such punitive measures in a membership or preselection contract.

I call this system lobocracy — rule by lobby groups through lobotomized politicians who are not allowed to think for themselves.

But now it is worse still. The thought police of 'political correctness' are telling me what I can think and say and do and believe — and with the tools of mandated educational brainwashing, social media and cancel culture, these issues of minority lobbying have moved from the floor of the house to my livingroom, my children's school, my local hospital and my own workplace: the minority is always right.

I'm being told what I can and can't say to my students. I'm being told what I can and can't say in my books — even what characters I must include in my novels or my classes, and what words I can and cannot use. When I express my reservations about the political correctness bandwagons, or exercise my vote against them, I'm not told that I'm wrong — just that I'm brave. People who exercise their democratic right to speak and vote against various 'progressive' measures have their words turned against them, sometimes years later, some to the extent of losing their jobs, their livelihoods or their freedom -– not to mention massive fines. This move against traditional values and rights is anything but progressive — it is both regressive and repressive. Since 1984, free speech has been increasingly replaced by doublethink enforced by thought police.

We now live in a culture of fear: the cancel culture. 

We are told what to say and think and write. We are told to 'represent' certain classes of people and expected to promote corresponding political views in our stories, or to use examples that aren't us and aren't ours and don't fit. And the gatekeepers enforce this. The 'diversity' committees (enforcing discrimination for overrepresentation of minorities) wag the dog, and care more about such orchestrated regressive and repressive 'correctness' policies than good education, good training or good literature.

And if I don't use the poltically correct form, I am lambasted for it - even if the community concerned hates the 'woke' labels. And one of the worse is 'challenged'.

What happened to free speech?

The silent majority has been alienated, unwelcome in their own country.

Even the minorities whose causes have been taken on board can find themselves used, stereotyped and labeled in ways that they don't own. Even those who have recourse to the 'positive' discrimination of the diversity ethos, don't necessarily want it.

I don't want to be labeled or advantaged or disadvantaged because of my (so-called) indigenous or convict or conqueror heritage, because of my 'disabilities' or my 'beliefs' or my 'gender' or my inherited (and often rewritten) 'history' (or other 'challenges'). I want to be seen as myself, as how I am, through what I can contribute, in terms of my own abilities and capabilities, strengths and weaknesses.

I don't want to be silenced just because what I have to say doesn't push a lobocracy agenda!

Why should I have to start at a disadvantage because I'm seen as part of the underepresented majority?
Or because rebels without a cause of their own have ousted control of my minority group?

Why do I feel like I'm an alien in my own country?

Why do I keep silent about it?

Why am I afraid?


Friday, October 18, 2019

Science as Religion


What is science?


Empiricism


The word science actually means knowledge and refers to our understanding of our world, our universe. A closely related word is ontology which more literally means the study or understanding or logic of what is - but this has a closer relationship to what an individual understands about their world, including the internal and external aspects of our physical environment as we experience it, including the linguistic, social, cultural and ethical aspects.

The scientific method is often described as being an experimental method, or more formally empiricism. But there is also a flipside to this which is theory.


So how does this work?

Basically we are trying to understand the world, whether we are a scientist doing empirical science or an infant learning language and ontology. This means we collect data (who, what, when, where) and seek to develop explanations (why and how). These are all good questions to ask, and it is the last two in particular that are what scientists and infants ask incessantly.

The explanations (theories) usually involve assumptions (hypotheses) about things we don't directly know, rules (laws) that we think connect different parts of the data (observations),  reasoning (logic) from the hypotheses to show that the known data is consistent (verification),  and then exploring consequences of the theory (predictions) that take us into areas we haven't yet observed - and finally we run experiments to confirm or disconfirm these predictions (empiricism), and the theories may typically allow us to build new constructs (apparatus and technology). 

Figuring out how to apply these theories and adapt these technologies to our needs is called applied science, while design and engineering take over the eventual building and ongoing manufacturing of the resulting products.

But when people believe their theories, that is a matter of faith not science, and many social models and theories are more like religions in terms of being believed with religious fervour and defining a prescriptive way of life. Unfortunately belief in Evolution also has more of the characteristics of religious belief than scientific empiricism - and that does more harm than good to the scientific case for Evolutionary Biology.

Popper vs Kuhn


This scientific method goes back millenia, to people like Leonardo da Vinci, Copernicus, Galileo, Kepler, Newton and so on. Some times new formalisms, new forms of mathematics are developed as part of this process - like the development of calculus by Newton. This leads also to the idea of pure and applied mathematics too.

The empirical method was very clearly formulated by Karl Popper, who characterized real science prescriptively as developing theories, making predictions and testing them experimentally. He quite sharply delineated proper science as being capable of invalidation, and proper scientists as actively making predictions into the unknown that could potentially invalidate their theories.

It is anathema to actually try to bolster and maintain your theories without making such predictions and experiments, or in the face of contradictory evidence from the experiments.

Thomas Kuhn took a more practical descriptive approach - scientists in practice are human and tend to defend their ivory towers, patching theories while controlling who gets employed and who gets published to keep down outsiders with competing theories.  Basically abandoning a theoretical approach and adopting a new theory comes in one of two ways: a paradigm shift where the results and contradictions are too big to ignore; and dying out literally as the old vanguard passes away.

So how do we compare two theories. Again there are basically two ideas that go back millennia: the first relates directly to the empirical method: we take the two theories to points where they make different predictions, and perform experiments to see which (if any) predictions are borne out; or if we can't make such predictions, or the old theory has been patched to give the right results, then we use the parsimony criterion that the simples theory is best (Occam's Razor).

Interestingly, supervised Machine Learning works in a similar way, making changes in a model anytime it gets things wrong, until it is right on all the data - but in the end we could just remember all the data to be always right (instance/example based learning). But this has a danger of overfitting, and the simpler model is to be preferred - and we must also make sure we always test on unseen data to make sure we are not just overfitting to the noise, and eventually we must take the model to different places and different sources of data to make sure we aren't overfitting to artefacts of the way (who, what, when, where, why, how) we collected the data.

Chomsky: nature vs nurture


One good illustration of this is the question of whether language is learned or innate. This goes back decades, and in particular Noam Chomsky believed that language was inherently innate, with specific organs for things like syntax and phonology that were "as real as the heart or the liver".  But the experiments were not performed to verify this, nor were the biological predictions formalized.  Chomsky's Principles and Parameters theory was humbly known as standard theory in the 1970s and 1980s (with Chomsky regarded as the founder of standard linguistics by his followers). It was based on knowledge and patterns from all known languages, and could generally be massaged to fit the inconvenient data that sometimes emerged.

The contrary view is most clearly represented by Jean Piaget (known as the father of psycholinguistics) who studied how studied all aspects of how the child learned about his world, language and culture (publishing over 20 books on the experiments exploring different facets of his constructivist theory). Other important names on this side of the ledger include George Lakoff  (known as the father of cognitive linguistics) who emphasized the role of metaphor and analogy in the way language was learned and evolved. There is an excellent volume published in 1979 about the Debate between Chomsky and Piaget, and an excellent volume called Metaphors we live by published by Lakoff and Johnson in 1980.

Of course one way to explore this question empirically is to look at programming computers to learn the way a human baby does. David Powers and Chris Turk published Machine Learning of Natural Language in 1989 based on a decade of experimentation of this kind by Powers, building on Kenneth Pike's theories of phonology, tagmemic grammar and universals of human behaviour, as well as hypothesizing separate recognition and production grammars, grounding the language learner in a simulated robot world, and predicting things like mirror neurons – connecting this to Turk's idea of anticipated correction and providing a neurologically plausible computational basis for the emergent constructivist cognitive linguistics approach. 

In the 1980s, Cognitive Science emerged as an interdisciplinary group of disciplines, as people realized that is was important to cross the disciplinary boundaries between linguistics, psychology and neuroscience, to connect to the theoretical explorations of philosophers, and to exploit the computational modelling capabilities of computers: that actually allowed cognitive and evolutionary theories to be tested in ways not hitherto possible. Moreover Cognitive Linguistics emerged during the course of the decade as a direct rebellion against linguistic theories that didn't believe in learning, with Lakoff's 1987 book Women, Fire and Dangerous Things being an important landmark in defining the emergent field.

In the 1990s, Luc Steels took this language learning approach in a new direction, looking at the way language is evolved by cooperating robots working in a physical environment. This led to exciting collaborative experiments in the area of robotic language games, and a whole new perspective on the nature of language.

In the 1990s, David Powers broadened out from a focus on syntax, semantics and ontology into exploring the emergence of phonemes and morphemes in text and speech, leading to a self-organized multimodal hierarchy of linguistic processing that automatically learned to parse from phonetic features all the way up to phrases and clauses.

In the 1990s Noam Chomsky abandoned his 'standard' P&P approach, publishing his new minimalist program around 1992. However massive divides persist in linguistics to this day, and computational linguistics has moved out of linguistics into computer science - to a considerable extent losing and ignoring the traditional psychological and linguistic insights.

In the 21st century, academic scientists and university department have unfortunately gone back into their disciplinary boxes and ivory towers, while research in artificial intelligence has largely been driven by commercial considerations. The rapid expansion of information technology and black box approaches to  neural networks has left little room for students to be trained in the relevant cognitive science, or to learn the language and ethos of the other relevant disciplines.

Dawkins: Evolution vs God


The second illustration we will use is the treatment of evolution in science, including both formal scientific writing and the popular writing of esteemed scientists.

In the penultimate paragraph of the introductory chapter to his 2019 book "Outgrowing God",
Richard Dawkins writes "all I need to say at present is that evolution is a definite fact: we are cousins of chimpanzees, slightly more distant cousins of monkeys, very much more distant cousins of fish and so on." Is this what we would expect from a top scientist?

In his previous writings Dawkins refers to biblical stories and characters as myths, while other people from similar periods are treated as historical. In "Outgrowing God" he does seek to justfiy this view by referring to literary criticism of the historical documents, and hypotheses of assertions. In the end, he admits the possibility that Jesus actually existed (and notes that the gospels were written long after Jesus death, and that people "wrongly believe" they were written by the authors they are attributed too - ignoring the internal evidence of Mark, Luke and John in particular, that there were stories circulating from early times, and identifying themselves in their texts).

There is considerable support for believing that key biblical characters existed. To start with the most obvious and superficial: Christians incorporate the name of Christ, and Semites (semitic races) incorporate the name of Shem, reflecting traditions going back to the named figures, with two large racial groups tracing their roots to Abraham (through Ishmael and Isaac). Other key biblical figures interacted with key political figures of the time - and generally the bible's view of Jews and Christians is not always positive: it tends to be no holds barred in a way that speaks to their existence. In several cases, there is more evidence than for other historical figures of the same era. Thus it is prejudicial to call these mythical and others historical.

There are no testable predictions and scientific experiments we can perform here, but nonetheless there is, in all cases, evidence we can weigh.

On the other hand, acknowledging these people actually existed doesn't of itself mean that God exists, created the universe, or is interested in mankind, or has sent a saviour – although it does suggest that there are some purportedly miraculous events in the historical records that otherwise need to be explained away.

The essential point here is that evolution is also a theory where it is difficult to make testable predictions. It should not be held as a matter of faith - to do so is religion not science.

Furthermore the theories of how particular animals might have evolved depends on myths called "just so stories" that take their name from Rudyard Kipling's (1902) Just So Stories for young children, stories like  How The Camel Got His Hump; How The Leopard Got His Spots; How The First Letter Was Written; How The Alphabet Was Made. These evolutionary "just so stories" are true myths, as nobody seriously believes that they represent actual historical events – although their authors hope there might be some similarity to what actually happened (but in some cases they seem more hysterical than historical).

One additional complication with dealing with evolution as a theory is that there is no well-defined theory, and indeed different people at different times mean different things by evolution.

Evolution vs Genetics


Charles Darwin knew all about selective breeding, that is artificial selection, and that is where the name came for his theory of natural selection. His contemporary, Gregor Mendel formally studied artificial selection and effectively predicted the discovery of genes and the idea of genetic crossover of the parents genes – however, Darwin may not have been aware of Mendel's contemporaneous work. It seems he did have the journal volume in which the paper appeared, but the pages in that copy had not been cut (although that doesn't necessarily mean he didn't hear about it on the scientific grapevine or have someone else show him their copy). 

Work and publication of Origin of the Species did make Darwin question his Christian faith, or at least orthodox versions of it, as well as gaining him the criticism of some elements of the church –despite withholding his discussion of mankind as "so surrounded with prejudices" (letter to Alfred Wallace). He, however, didn't use the word "evolution" till Descent of Man, which did address this application to mankind and human races (and indeed the one use of any version of the verb "evolve" came right at the end of the extant editions of Origin of the Species).

Natural selection as a building block of evolutionary theory is well established, and these days not particularly controversial – having the character of making predictions that have been confirmed.  Of course, there is an artificial component to all experiments, but rather than direct breeding it has been possible to explore the changes in certain species engendered by changing environmental conditions or translating them to a different environment and/or ecosystem.

Creation Accounts and Myths


It should be emphasized that many Christians (and people of other religions) have no particular problem with proposed artificial and natural selection mechanisms, and the genetic processes that lead to evolution of species to better fit their changing ecological niches. Although transmutation of species, or evolution of new species, has proven hard to demonstrate (in the sense that new phenotypes and genotypes can still interbreed).

But what of the the "myths" of the Bible, as Dawkins calls them: the "creation myths" and "genealogical myths". 

In many ways the Bible's "genealogical myths" are not much different from the "biological classifications" of Linnaeus.  The Linnaean taxonomy was a very important contribution, and the classifications did represent specific predictions about relatedness that have been tested (and much revised) based on genetic evidence. The family genealogies of the Bible did, of course, start off as oral history, and have been maintained more recently in written records.  Cluster Analysis and Principle Component Analysis of genome diversity across races is remarkably consistent with the biblical genealogies dating back to Noah, and it is also interesting to compare that with taxonomic/cluster analyses and geographical dispersion of linguistic diversity.

Genesis 1 and Genesis 2 actually provide two different accounts of creation — the first dealing with creation in its broader sense, culminating in the creation and dominion of mankind, while chapter 2 gives the story of Adam and Eve and lays the foundation for the fall into sin of Genesis 3 The first chapter has a somewhat poetic character and the seven days can be interpreted as eras (like the day of the dinosaur) and this is reflected elsewhere in the Bible. Similarly there is some evidence of editing of the lists of generations and choosing key figures to make a point. Days and weeks, sixes and sevens, are used metaphorically as for (in)complete periods of time. Matthew's grouping into three groups of fourteen generations from Abraham to David to Exile to Jesus is six of seven "weeks".  We are still in the seventh "day" of creation, the day of rest, according to the book of Hebrews, and we are evidently in the seventh set of seven "generations" according to Matthew. In fact, Genesis 2:4-5 uses the same word "day" to encapsulate the entire period of creation up to the point where man was created.

The Genesis 1 account thus doesn't purport to be day by day history, but reading through it sounds remarkably like a bystander viewpoint on different stages of creation. Many Jews, Moslems and Christians tend to believe that it is not intended to be taken literally — and this view was current around the time that Darwin published Origin of the Species and accounts for the less than expected criticism across the church — in a sense it was overshadowed by the more general controversy over literary criticism of the biblical texts.

Psalm 90 and 2 Peter 3 equate a day with an epoch of "a thousand years". And as for "week",  in Genesis 29, Jacob's weeks of work for Laban are 7 year each; and in Leviticus 25 "week" is used first for a seven year period, and then for seven such seven-year periods leading to the jublilee. Daniel 9 also makes a prediction of 70 weeks (=490 years). Our word sabbatical, is the sabbath day of rest at the end of the work week translated to years of employment. 

Story structure is still at sixes and sevens in modern story telling (cf. John Truby, Chris Booker and Randy Ingermanson). Indeed our psyche is very much at sixes and sevens as evidenced by Miller's Magical Number Seven. We perceive (subitize and discriminate) accurately below seven and chunk in approximate terms like a handful, half a dozen, several, or a week... We have seven hour marks on the (sun)dial for dawn to midday and midday to dusk and similarly for month markings  between equinox and solstice (curves on sundials). Even powerpoint slides in best practice limit to at most seven dot points.

The Genesis 2 account reads very much like a just-so-story or fable aimed at teaching a particular lesson in poetic dot points, although in the bible many such stories are painted as literally happening, sometimes there is debate as to they are meant to be interpreted literally or as parables. But in a sense this is irrelevant, as an omnipotent God could choose to teach Adam his place in the world, and that of his wife/woman (no separate words in Hebrew or Greek), by literally enacting this Adam's Rib story. In the Old Testament, God loves these acted parables/prophecies.

The Genesis 7 account of Noah and the flood is also open to interpretation. In particular what is meant by "world" or "earth". The gestation period of 40 weeks (also thought of as six weeks of weeks) is a time of testing/travail cut short and leading to (re)birth ("travail" has both the sense of traveling on a journey, and is etymologically a form of "travel", as well as the sense of painful hard work and "labour" in the sense of the journey through the birth canal. The period referred to by the 40 translates down to days for individual experience (40 days of Noah's flood, of Jesus' temptation in the wilderness marking the start of his ministry, and of Jesus time of teaching his disciples after his resurrection before his ascension), and up to years (Israel's 40 years of testing in the wilderness after escape from slavery in Egypt) or even decades (Israel's 400 years in Egypt, birthing a nation).

Here it is important to remember that when it was composed, the most it could be expected to represent was the "known inhabitd world" centring around the meeting point of Africa, Europe and Asia (the Middle East): the "new world" had yet to be discovered, and even that was just the Americas - the southern continents of Australia and Antartica are not part of either the old or the new world! Furthermore, the word "earth" (the expression in this chapter is "face of the earth" or "face of the ground") and can refer to the dirt and soil that is the foundation for life. There is no claim or words that imply "global flood", and a global flood wouldn't have been needed to wipe out mankind when still confined to the region of the Africa–Middle-East conjunction (actually part of Africa until relatively recently).

Similar considerations apply to the Genesis 11 account of the Tower of Babel and the emergence of different languages. Interestingly, God decides to "confuse their language" and does this by "scattering them abroad from there over the face of all the earth" (diaspora).

Initially, that need not have included crossing oceans to other continents, and humans clearly did migrate across land bridges and cross rivers and straits, and 60-70,000 years ago evidently accidentally or intentionally reached Australia without a need to cross more than 100km of water – and indeed the evidence suggests that the earliest Australian aboriginals were also able to cross to Tasmania, which was also accessible via a land bridge even as little as 30,000 years ago. Indeed these Tasmanian aboriginals seem to be genetically divergent from those that arrived in the last 10,000 years and one way of another the earlier race disappeared from the mainland. Even today, crossing from Siberia to Alaska requires bridging only around 40km of the Bering Strait, and there is evidence of accidental crossings of animals on ice floes.

Evolution of the Gene - the Science and the Fiction


In general, evolutionary theory is itself highly dependent on myths and just-so-stories to illustrate how things might have happened, although without the miraculous element of the Adam's Rib account. Furthermore there is a problem with evolutionary being "saltatory", that is jumping faster than evolutionists can easily account for - and the flipside of this is "missing links". But this doesn't mean evolution of the species or of mankind in such an undirected way is wrong, just that it is unproven - although it does beg further assumptions: e.g. the assumption of some kind of big-bang to primordial soup starting point (or similar). Of course their are other possible assumptions, e.g. the assumption of a God that directs the course of speciation – God could potentially directly reuse (genetic) components of earlier species and/or could control environmental conditions to more indirectly direct the course of evolution.

Many Christians accept this kind of post-genetic evolution in some form, but with God playing a role at points in the story: theistic evolution. The case for atheistic evolution is, however, not helped by its frequent personification as Evolution with a capital-E in the role of intelligent agent.

Knowledge of breeding and artificial selection techniques, and indeed theories that predicted some sort of genetic basis for speciation, were already extant in Darwin's time – and the predictions often did not tend to go beyond what was already known to be possible, and as noted above involved direct or indirect manipulation of either the breeding or the ecosystem.

Furthermore the big question that is somewhat less in focus, but nonetheless fundamental to big-E Evolution, is how the gene evolved, as well as related questions such as how and why sexual dimorphism evolved.

And taking a step back from that, there is the question of how  DNA, RNA, proteins and the like emerged from the mythical primordial slime.  Some relatively simple organic molecules (components of DNA, RNA and proteins) have emerged in test tube experiments, but we are a long way from explaining this.

From a science fiction perspective, if there are environmental conditions and pressures that could evolve such complex molecules, does this entail that compatible molecules will evolve in different environments (different planets in different galaxies).  SF theories of parallel evolution explicitly assume so - and it is not an unreasonable expectation of this kind of pre-genetic evolution.

But interbreeding between species on Earth is not possible (by definition of species), so interbreeding between earth and interplanetary or intergalactic species is also very unlikely without either some prior contact (genetic exchange/panspermia) or some kind of deliberate engineering (genetic manipulation/splicing) or some kind of common creator (intelligent design/theistic evolution).


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So it is not likely that "parallel evolution" could lead to compatible species on other worlds.  Quite apart from the general question of "life" on other worlds, the inability of species to interbreed even on earth makes that difficult without some sort of genetic manipulation. But this is not the only questions - can we even expect to eat the plants and animals on another earth-like planet? Maybe! 

The interesting question of compatibility at the level of DNA and RNA is one which is much more feasible as they are the only molecular building blocks we know of that can before their various genetic and messenger functions - my Paradisi Chronicles Casindra Lost series finds an affirmative answer to this on New Eden!


My Paradisi Lost stories

My Casindra Lost stories feature genetic engineering and an emergent AI 'Al' and a captain who is reluctantly crewed with him on a rather long journey to another galaxy — just the two of them, and some cats... There's another one, 'Alice' that emerges more gradually in the Moraturi arc. The Paradisi colonization aims to preserve the pristine ecosystems of New Eden, restrict mining to the other planets and asteroids of the system, and genetically modify people to suit the ecosystem rather than overwhelm it with introduced species: https://paradisichronicles.wordpress.com/

Casindra Lost
Kindle ebook (mobi) edition ASIN: B07ZB3VCW9 — tiny.cc/AmazonCL
Kindle paperback edition ISBN-13: 978-1696380911 justified Iowan OS
Kindle enlarged print edn ISBN-13: 978-1708810108 justified Times NR 16
Kindle large print edition ISBN-13: 978-1708299453 ragged Trebuchet 18

Moraturi Lost
Kindle ebook (mobi) edition ASIN: B0834Z8PP8 – tiny.cc/AmazonML
Kindle paperback edition ISBN-13: 978-1679850080 justified Iowan OS 

Moraturi Ring
Kindle ebook (mobi) edition ASIN: B087PJY7G3 – tiny.cc/AmazonMR
Kindle paperback edition ISBN-13: 979-8640426106 justified Iowan OS 

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